Life's Better by Marcus "BOZ" Walton - Short, Drama - There is a huge gap between forgiveness and revenge, but which gives the best pleasure in the end? 25 pages - pdf format

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The script is decent. The premise is funny, but I don't like the characters. I don't know why, but they just didn't click for me. Maybe it's the way they constantly call each other "babe", that's grating. You have some funny lines, but they're few and far between. You need to add more depth to your characters, make them more likeable, add more jokes. I'm sure it will get better. You have talent, no doubt about it. There are a few punctual errors, but that's usually the case. Here's some advice to avoid this happening again: Finish your script, leave it for a week. Re-read and edit. Leave for three days, read through it again. Trust me it works. Best of luck