Weight of the Wind by Hayden Bownds - Drama - A suicidal man is taken on a time-traveling journey of self-discovery by God and Satan, forcing him to come to terms with his faults and enabling him to mend the wounds he’s left in his tracks. 90 pages

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Hayden - perused the first three pages - nothing major but you do have some tidying up to do - probably true throughout:

Quoted Text JONAS V.O

Should be JONAS (V.O)

Quoted Text LIVINGROOM

LIVING ROOM

Quoted Text TAYLOR (PRE-LAP)

Pretty sure it's not a pre-lap

Quoted Text CUSTOMERS O.S.

CUSTOMERS (O.S)

Quoted Text Taylor chats with the manager. Jonas eavesdrops while holding back a deluge of tears.

You have not previously intro'd the manager - should be CAP