Shalefield by Mike W. Rogers - Short, Drama - The only thing more precious than the land you raise your family, is the ability to keep your family on that land. Regardless the cost. 14 pages

contest:Southern California Screenplay Contest Semi-Finalist 2018, Nazareth Film Festival 2017 - Finalist 2017 - pdf format - pdf format

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Shalefield by Mike W. Rogers - Short, Drama - The only thing more precious than the land you raise your family, is the ability to keep your family on that land. Regardless the cost. 14 pages

contest: Southern California Screenplay Contest Semi-Finalist 2018, Nazareth Film Festival 2017 - Finalist 2017 - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work

Thanks, Don, for posting Shalefield.
Would be great to hear some feedback.
I'll be checking out the other members screenplay in the meantime.

Hi Mike,

The strength of the story is the relationship between a proud father and his son. I felt there were some great moments.

Apart from formatting issues, the story was okay. But I think you could tell this story in 8 - 10 pages.

IMO, continuously describing the lengths and depths of the hole in detail, was unnecessary.


Welcome to SimplyScripts

Regards,

Daniel

Thank you for the feedback. I am going to take your advise and shorten the piece as you suggested.
I wrote the screenplay in Celtx. What are the formatting issues you are seeing?
Thank you again for your feedback, I truly appreciate it.
Mike

Celtic is fine, didn't see any major formatting issues aside from the 'continued' on each page, but far as I know you can take that off as an option in Celtix as its not really needed.