Aurora Peace Knight Series by Jordan C lee - Action, Adventure - Seneca Aurora of watches and protects his Country Arcete. As a Peace knight solider, a centurion cyborg in the future of 3030. Set 3 billion years into the future, people are born new with evolution of Cyborg A.I. abilities with amazing god like capableness of super human strengths.  The New world lives off an Nomadic society system of evolving over each other with there superhuman strengths. Wars are waged as other country try take over each other as superior ones live higher than primitive ones with super powers.  90 pages - pdf, format

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Hi Jordan, I'm not sure how to comment on this.

The logline needs some serious work. I have no idea what this is about.

Had a look at the script. We are talking about pages and pages of dialogue, some monologues taking as much as two pages. The action is also just as long.

I’m guessing English isn’t your first language; I struggled to make sense of just about everything I read.

"..." does not constitute dialogue.

There is so so much wrong here, all I can suggest is that you read a lot more scripts to see how it’s done. A few articles on the general art of screenwriting will also be helpful.

All the best.

The logline says the story takes place in the year 3030, which is described as "3 billion years in the future."

A few more zeros to add on then.