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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board / Action/Adventure Scripts / American Born
Posted by: Don, March 2nd, 2018, 5:46pm
American Born by David Foster - Action, Adventure - 2 men living during George Washingtons time. 106 pages - pdf, format
For production consideration - No comments required
Posted by: eldave1, March 3rd, 2018, 10:58am; Reply: 1
David: I don't get it. You took a lot of time to write a script. Yet you:
- Wrote what is essentially a half a logline.
- Did not complete a Title Page
- Included something akin to a synopsis on your opening page.
- Don't bother to use any semblance of proper scene headings.
- Don't use periods or question marks. I don't think there is more then one or two in the first six pages.
So I don't get it. Why do all of the hard work of writing dialogue, creating a story, etc. if you're not going to pay attention to some of the very basic stuff?
Posted by: HyperMatt, March 3rd, 2018, 11:24am; Reply: 2
David: I don't get it. You took a lot of time to write a script. Yet you:
So I don't get it. Why do all of the hard work of writing dialogue, creating a story, etc. if you're not going to pay attention to some of the very basic stuff?
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Looks like he is passionate about the story. But he really needs 101 on the proper formatting of a screenplay.
Posted by: eldave1, March 3rd, 2018, 12:34pm; Reply: 3
Looks like he is passionate about the story. But he really needs 101 on the proper formatting of a screenplay.
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Twas a mystery to me
Posted by: Reel-truth, March 3rd, 2018, 7:17pm; Reply: 4
If you want people to give your a script and honest read, you gotta' clean this up. The fact that you don't use punctuations is impossible to read through. My advice is to read some other scripts, get a feel of how it's suppose to be executed.
And that logline...c'mon man...102 page script and you got a 5 word logline that tells us nothing.
I do like the title though ;D
Posted by: Lono, March 20th, 2018, 11:32am; Reply: 5
You need to figure out what your story is about; it's all just so confusing. For example, your scene headings:
BALL ROOM DANCE
Should be:
INT. BALLROOM - NIGHT
One word. Ball Room suggests a room full of balls, at least that's how I read it. Your scene headings are the least of the problems. You need to learn proper formatting.
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