Transformers - Retaliation by Luis Filipe Araujo - Sci Fi, Fantasy, Action - After a year on Earth, the Transformers live like robots in disguise among humans. The Autobots now have to deal with the Decepticons, who are stealing energy from the planet for unknown purposes, while at Cybertron, the Autobot Resistance must face a new challenge. 124 pages - pdf, format

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Man, I hate those one word sequel subtitles, Retaliation, Nemesis, Geneis, Rising.
But at least it does not rhyme with ressurection : Insurrection,

haha I confess that I regretted it a little after a while

You should rename it.
The old TV show had some cool episode titles: 'Countdown to Oblivion', 'The Ultimate Doom' 'Plague of the Insecticons'.

Is this a sequel to Sins of War or a separate piece?

Yeah, I'll think of a good name later. And yes, it's a sequel of Sins of War, which by the way I've rewrote the end where Megatron's lifeless body is held by the government. My plan is to do a trilogy like the game Halo or Lord of the Rings. I even think the title "Countdown to Oblivion" matches well with the third script.

Or ‘Descent Into Oblivion’ , or ‘Ascension from Oblivion’. Sounds like those heavy Marvel Comics stories from the 60s and 70s. Hasbro should be paying us for these cool ideas!

You really like the word "Oblivion" huh haha. But they are good title tips, I will consider them when I write my third script. I'll end by sending an email to Hasbro about this talk haha

Read Page 1-10.
Not bad Luis. It reads, and is better paced a lot better than your early efforts.
Get a real sense of war, destruction, and depression on Cybertron, like the future from the first 2 Terminator films.
I haven't seen the Bumblebee movie, they say it is better than any of the Bay films, but that was not going to be hard.
I see your channeling Transformers the Movie from 1986. I like the robot characterizations, like Ultra Magnus, but I remember Hot Rod being a much more jovial soul than the bitter killer he is here. I'll read the rest and give you my comments at some point.