Conservative by Doug J Robbins - Short, Comedy - Ultra Conservative Tom finds out his son is gay. Not being able to deal with this, hilarity ensues when Tom takes his son Aden on a father son bonding weekend to try and convert his homosexual son into a straight man. 19 pages - pdf format

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Issue at the start.

Quoted Text INT. DINER AFTERNOON TOM PARKER SITS ACROSS FROM HIS SON ADEN AT A BOOTH. HE TAKES A SIP OF HIS COFFEE AND EYES OVER HIS BOY.

Wrong format for header.

INT. DINER - AFTERNOON

The first line should not be all in CAPS - only your character's name.

Give ages and descriptions for Tom and Aden.

Take a look at a few scripts - you'll get it.