Mendacity by Tasheka Smith - Drama, Thriller - A run away rape victim's past comes knocking at her front door and her unaware  husband answers. Now to keep her newly created family she has to return home and slay her demon, in doing so dead bones start to fall-out of the closet and shocking secrets are coming to light. 140 - pdf format

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I’d check the pdf you uploaded Tasheka. A lot of Ès

I don't follow... E's?

Tasheka: several issues just in the first 2/3rds pf the page.

Quoted Text 25 YEARS AGO

You need to do the above via a SUPER.  Can't just put it there. Something like:

INT. DANIEL’S ROOM - DAY

A 13 years old DANIEL JAY, African American, stands in
front of her full length mirror, admiring her floral church
dress.

SUPER: 25 YEARS AGO

Quoted Text A 13 years old DANIEL JAY, African American, stands in front of her full length mirror, admiring her floral church dress.

Could be crisper. Don't need A to start, don't need "her" mirror (obviously it is)

DANIEL JAY (13), African-American, stands in
front of a full length mirror, admiring her floral church
dress.

Quoted Text Daniel smiles at herself and twist and turn as if she was a contestant in a pageant.

Again - not "herself" not needed. Twist should be twists and turn should be turns.

Quoted Text DEBRA (O.S.) Miss Daniel get away from that mirror! It’s Sunday and Sunday is church day!

Need a comma after Daniel

Quoted Text MARKUS (O.S.) Come down now Danny! We have to go!

Need comma after now.

Quoted Text DANIEL Yes Mama I know it’s church time and I’m coming down in a second Dad.

Need a comma after Mama and one after second

Quoted Text MARKUS (O.S.) Danny we have to pick up UNCLE CURTIS! Let’s get it moving

Need a comma after Danny. Don't cap Uncle Curtis.

Quoted from Tasheka I don't follow... E's?

I think Dave's using euphemisms to soften the fact some fixes are perhaps in order.
Errors/issues.
I too thought for a minute the script must have had vowel problems.  :D

Eldave1 thanks so much for your input😊 I made the changes👌

Quoted from Tasheka Eldave1 thanks so much for your input😊 I made the changes👌

You're welcome - best of luck with it

Thanks a lot:)