CandyCellers by Benin Trotter - Drama, Family Drama, Gangster - Where "The Pursuit of Happyness" meets "American Gangster". Late 70's  Portland is brought to life by a Black female, ex-con, Harrie, who resorts to selling candy as she struggles with the system and ex, Big Dee, for custody of their son, P'nut. 119 pages

Contests: Diverse Voices (Fall 2018) Semifinalist; Dark Matter Media (Fall 2018) Third Place - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

I'm no expert and waiting for my first script to post. I read the first six pages and noticed spelling errors. I get the dialogue uses a lot of slang, but I feel the ACTION LINES should use proper grammar/spelling. As I said, I'm no expert and still finding grammar and spelling issues even after going over my script 3-4 times.

ALSO...if you're using Amazon's free Story Writer, I've noticed after I corrected errors, I go back and the original errors reappear days later.  >:(

GOOD LUCK!

Don't do this:

Quoted Text EXT. WOMEN’S CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - SALEM, OREGON - NIGHT (SUMMER 1978). Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked barracks.

Do this:

EXT. WOMEN’S CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - NIGHT

Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination
encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked
barracks.

SUPER: SALEM, OREGON - SUMMER, 1978

Good suggestions. Made some corrections. Thank you

Quoted from Benin Good suggestions. Made some corrections. Thank you

My pleasure