Coming Home by Simon K. Parker - Short, Drama - An overprotective father is tested my a beautiful young women when he crashes a party looking for his son who has broken curfew. 5 pages - pdf format

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Interesting read packs a lot of effective drama for 5 pages. I thought the dad character was done well, he's a real hard ass. This is really his story.
At the party I think you should indicate exactly how many teenagers are around.
I think some of the dialogue could be shortened just a bit.