Sugars by Rob Herzog - Short, Comedy - Things get wild when a substitute teacher brings sugar into the classroom. 7 pages - pdf format

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This was written well. It doesn't make much sense but who cares? Kind of has a Willy Wonka vibe to it. Was expecting some kind of tie-up at the end, but there wasn't one. Again, no big deal. Glad there were no zombies. Jeez, enough of that!

That was a fun read. Well written and very well paced actions.

But I'm left a bit deflated with the ending, I was hoping for a twist or some change in the kid's behaviour or viewpoint. But essentially the naughty boys stayed naughty, the sensitive kid stayed sensitive.

Unless I'm missing something, which is entirely possible :-)