Pencil by Russ Gladden - Short, Drama - Follow the events that lead up to the moment Josh felt his world crashing in around him. 8 pages - pdf format

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Hi Russ

If you are serious about screenwriting then you need to do a lot more studying of the craft (a lot more). The formatting isn't even close to being correct.
It reads as if you thought "I'll give script writing a go, how hard can it be" and just jumped right in.
You also missed to fill in the title page.

So yeah, study and practice before you get to the stage of posting scripts up for review or consideration.

Best of luck

Matt

Russ, You have a start.  You will find that script writing is a series of almost never ending re-writes.  I recommend getting the book "The Screenwriter's Bible, by David Trotter."

Keep Writing,

Steve

Yeah, Russ - you are missing the basics. Need to put some work and research in.