Shooting by Isaac Sweeney - Short, Drama, Urban - Will Angel choose the future he wants or the revenge his family deserves? 15 pages

Screenplay festival live reading (YouTube) - pdf format

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There were a lot of formatting issues, but they can easily be remedied.

There wasn't a lot new here.  It had a Boyz N The Hood feel to it, but it lacked any real punch.  I do like the fact that Angel had a choice at the end, which makes a film.  Choice.  

The characters have to make a choice.  I have to feel their dilemma.  Their struggle.  I have to feel they're torn between "right" and "wrong".

You alluded to that but I didn't really subscribe to the truth of it all.  It felt forced.

If you're around, Isaac, I'll go into detail on what I'm talking about.

Thanks for the read.

-Jordan