A Residual Haunting by Roberto Negron - Horror - A dysfunctional married couple end up getting tormented and picked on by the spirit of their estranged son who is still alive. 112 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hey, Roberto

Descriptive protag(s) in a logline is always good. The second half reads awakward. It's in the passive voice. Also, I'm not sure how quickly they find out the spirit is their son who turns out to be alive, but it sounds like a sizable revelation that may be better suited for just the script and just hinted at in the logline, unless there are more/bigger revelations to come.

I'll give the firs ten a look and see where it takes me.

BLB

You have lots of dialogue. You might want to try and show the action instead of so much dialogue. But otherwise a good premise.