Sleepover by Curtis James Coffey - Short, Horror - A young girl is terrorized in the middle of the night during her first ever sleepover at a friend's house. 9 pages - pdf format

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Interesting twist. Liked this one.

I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. To be honest, I wasn't sure about the twist at all, when I wrote it, so I'm glad that it worked!

Interesting.  It's an enjoyable read.  The dialogue is well written and the characters come to life.  Very nicely done.

The only thing I'd point out is to get rid of the numbers next to the sluglines.   They shouldn't be there in this stage of the script.  But otherwise, good job!

Gah. I didn't even realize the scenes were numbered. The software I use must automatically do it.