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Posted by: Don, June 17th, 2019, 11:08pm
A Liver Short by Anonymous23 - An upscale meat purveyor serves their product just in time. - Short, Horror

Out of the Mist by Jane Goodall - When a company jet crashes near the Congo River, the survivors find themselves in a fight for their lives. - Short, Horror

The Belly of the Beast by O Captain! My Captain! - After a couple survive a horrific plane crash, they find that the nightmare has only just begun. - Short, Horror

From the Light to the Sheyd by Not Kosher - An airline hijacker underestimates just how serious his hostages are about keeping holy the Sabbath. - Short, Horror

Terror From The Sky by Anonymous22 - While getting trashed in the woods, three dumb teenagers unwittingly get caught up in a military experiment that's gone terribly wrong. - Short, Horror

Ungodliness by Mr. Clean - If cleanliness is next to Godliness, what evil lurks in filth? - Short, Horror

The Red Weed by H. G. Wells - When a mysterious flora takes over the planet, one survivor will do anything to stay alive. - Short, Horror

3 Hail Marys by Anonymous21 - A young naval aviator deals with the personal aftermath of an attack on his task force. - Short, Horror

Paradise Airlines by Anonymous29 - Travel just got a whole worse with Paradise Airlines - Short, Horror

What Would You Do...? by Jett Black - A germophobe's courage is tested when he has to make a life and death choice. - Short, Horror

Virus by Vaccine - The use of hand sanitizer is meant to prevent viruses, not spread them! - Short, Horror

Mayday by Titus Porosus - A simple crop spraying trip goes well and truly south... - Short, Horror

Spore by Anonymous20 - An Elite Brazilian Airborne Rescue Squadron and a renowned Medical Officer must team up to search for the survivors of a plane crash in the Amazon Jungle, but the jungle holds secrets that may be worse than any plane crash. - Short, Horror

Reaper's Disease by D.H. Happins - A passenger of a flight wants to cleanse his body, and the bodies of all those around him. - Short, Horror

Ghost Plane by Arthur Sleep - An alcoholic wakes up on his flight to find himself embroiled in a fight with evil 35,000 feet in the air. - Short, Horror

A Dark Reflection by Reinhold Messner - Death isn't always the worst thing that can happen to you. - Short, Horror

Payload by Jet Sanitizer - A routine plane flight hides a deadly secret 4 pages - Short, Horror

Spores by Beacher Double Creacher - A ball turret gunner finds himself trapped after his bomber encounters the mysterious orbs known as foo fighters. - Short, Horror
Posted by: Warren, June 17th, 2019, 11:10pm; Reply: 1
Unbelievably fast as always! Thanks, Don and Sean.
Posted by: ReneC, June 17th, 2019, 11:10pm; Reply: 2
Don, you're a machine, man. Less than ten minutes after the deadline and I see the scripts already loading up. I raise my glass to you.
Posted by: Zack, June 17th, 2019, 11:11pm; Reply: 3
You're a monster, Don. ;D
Posted by: ReneC, June 17th, 2019, 11:15pm; Reply: 4
18...I really thought there would be fewer!
Posted by: stevie, June 17th, 2019, 11:17pm; Reply: 5
You guys are deadset legends
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, June 17th, 2019, 11:18pm; Reply: 6
Don, as usual, unbelievably good work. The links are all good, so everyone should be all set there. =)
Posted by: stevie, June 17th, 2019, 11:33pm; Reply: 7
I know how tough this challenge was and I vowed not to be harsh on the other entries if warranted. But I’ve read a few already and in some the hand sanitizer is only barely a part of the story lol    But I will be gentle!

Hmm I never knew HS was flammable

Just recalled that when trekking in Nepal in 2017, the guides had small bottles of HS we would use when we had lunch or after a toilet break lol, as you couldn’t wash your hands at most places
Posted by: Don, June 18th, 2019, 12:00am; Reply: 8

Quoted from Mr. Blonde
Don, as usual, unbelievably good work. The links are all good, so everyone should be all set there. =)


Sean,

Thanks for the validation. Little bumpy this time.  I think I've got it sorted.  Waiting on one more vote for Round 2 and I'm ready to post the standing.

Don
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 1:15am; Reply: 9

Quoted from stevie
I know how tough this challenge was and I vowed not to be harsh on the other entries if warranted. But I’ve read a few already and in some the hand sanitizer is only barely a part of the story lol    But I will be gentle!

Hmm I never knew HS was flammable

Just recalled that when trekking in Nepal in 2017, the guides had small bottles of HS we would use when we had lunch or after a toilet break lol, as you couldn’t wash your hands at most places



No need to be gentle. Almost all the ones I've read didn't have a hand sanitiser in the story at all. They may have called it hand sanitiser, but there's been pure ethanol, and the recurring theme of anti-spore, which is the very thing it doesn't do.

I gave 100% genre last round, this round so far only 2 of 8 I've read have met the criteria.
Posted by: LC, June 18th, 2019, 1:21am; Reply: 10
But Rick, was there a label marked Sanitizer on the bottle?  :D
...

I'm not convinced Sanitizer alone can combust as well as most people think. It needs another element, in this case static electricity.

https://www.livescience.com/27240-girl-catches-fire.html

Posted by: stevie, June 18th, 2019, 2:10am; Reply: 11
Just needs a bottle of HS in it for me but it must serve a purpose in the story    A couple have merely thrown one for the sake of the criteria
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 2:17am; Reply: 12

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films



No need to be gentle. Almost all the ones I've read didn't have a hand sanitiser in the story at all. They may have called it hand sanitiser, but there's been pure ethanol, and the recurring theme of anti-spore, which is the very thing it doesn't do.

I gave 100% genre last round, this round so far only 2 of 8 I've read have met the criteria.


Brutal, you obviously feel like you've nailed the criteria, or I imagine you'd be slightly more forgiving.


Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 2:24am; Reply: 13

Quoted from Warren


Brutal, you obviously feel like you've nailed the criteria, or I imagine you'd be slightly more forgiving.




The situations improved, tbf. I think I must have just hit the dodgy ones all in a row.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, June 18th, 2019, 3:00am; Reply: 14
only 2 dropouts - don't get me wrong, is good people are staying in, but I thought I was in for an easier reading week lol
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 3:07am; Reply: 15
Read them all.   A good batch, especially considering how difficult everyone was finding it.

I've got my scores on a .txt file, but I think I'll let things germinate and decide on what really constitutes meeting the criteria, or not.

Is Horror Comedy allowed?
Is it enough to have the sanitiser,or does it have to be relatively realistic in it's use?
There are degrees of probability here with the flammability in some stories.
There are some stories that use it for the impossible, like killing spores, but the sanitiser is there. Is that enough?

What are everyone's lines in the sand? I'm open to persuasion on it all...
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 3:08am; Reply: 16
I don't think people realise just how varied hand sanitizer can be.

https://www.britannica.com/topic/hand-sanitizer

Not the same article I put up last time, and worth a read. You might learn something.
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 3:10am; Reply: 17

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
Read them all.   A good batch, especially considering how difficult everyone was finding it.

I've got my scores on a .txt file, but I think I'll let things germinate and decide on what really constitutes meeting the criteria, or not.

Is Horror Comedy allowed?
Is it enough to have the sanitiser,or does it have to be relatively realistic in it's use?
There's degrees of probability here with the flammability in some stories.
There are some stories that use it for the impossible, like killing spores, but the sanitiser is there?

What are everyone's lines in the sand? I'm open to persuasion on it all...


Read the article I posted, it talks about concentration levels, viscosity, and other properties that people seem to be questioning.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 3:11am; Reply: 18
I read it before.


You don't get 95% ethanol hand sanitiser in planes, though, Warren. :)

Precisely to stop anyone doing what people are doing in the stories...
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 3:16am; Reply: 19

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
I read it before.


You don't get 95% ethanol hand sanitiser in planes, though, Warren. :)

Precisely to stop anyone doing what people are doing in the stories...


It's funny that in previous horror challenges people have picked my up for questioning logic. And now it's coming down to percentages of hand sanitizer haha.
Posted by: stevie, June 18th, 2019, 3:19am; Reply: 20
Nope horror comedy not allowed at all
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 3:20am; Reply: 21
I started a discussion. I could have just put the scores in.

So you think logic is important?
Posted by: AnthonyCawood, June 18th, 2019, 3:23am; Reply: 22
I think some leeway on logic is always allowed, it's fiction after all, here given the relatively unusual object, then I intend to be flexible with my views on its use.
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 3:25am; Reply: 23

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
I started a discussion. I could have just put the scores in.

So you think logic is important?


I have always thought logic was important.

I'm just making an observervation, that in general, with horror contests people are happy to let logic slide. I've never been one of them.

But now it's coming down to specific properties of something that generally meets the requirements.

Just an observation.
Posted by: stevie, June 18th, 2019, 3:34am; Reply: 24
It’s horror so logic isn’t really important as you have some supernatural stuff going on

If you mean do normal things have to keep logical then sure.  But weird creatures are fine.
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 3:38am; Reply: 25

Quoted from stevie
It’s horror so logic isn’t really important as you have some supernatural stuff going on

If you mean do normal things have to keep logical then sure.  But weird creatures are fine.


Okay, I'll buy that.
Posted by: stevie, June 18th, 2019, 3:43am; Reply: 26
I’ve read them all but not put all the reviews up yet.   They will all get a Y for criteria from me. This was tough.  Most of the ones I’ve read are better than any from Rd 2 so well done to all who whacked one in.
Posted by: jayrex, June 18th, 2019, 3:52am; Reply: 27
It's not drama.  Horror tends to be illogical most of the time.  I'll be lenient.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 4:33am; Reply: 28
Yeah, I'm inclined to agree.

The criteria said use a hand sanitiser. Logic issues are part of the story category.

Some of you can breathe a sigh of relief.
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 6:38am; Reply: 29
In saying that. I don't think any two people review things in the same way (as we all know). Got to do what's right for you.

As has been said before, the cream always seems to rise to the top regardless.

We can't all agree on everything, that would just be too boring :)

I think the people that shoehorned it in will tend to be more lenient, and those that feel they nailed it may not. Which in a funny way is probably fair enough. Be rewarded for doing it well and penalised for just getting it done.

I don't know. I'll start reading tomorrow and see how I feel after I've seen how people have used the criteria.

I did have a really quick scan of a few and the quality seemed really high.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, June 18th, 2019, 7:22am; Reply: 30
I just read my own entry to see if I could spot anything wrong with it in the cold light of day.
But I got bored halfway through reading it.... bugger
Posted by: FrankM, June 18th, 2019, 7:32am; Reply: 31

Quoted from Matthew Taylor
I just read my own entry to see if I could spot anything wrong with it in the cold light of day.
But I got bored halfway through reading it.... bugger


There’s just something about the woosh of a just-passed deadline that let’s me spot the mistakes in my own writing.
Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 8:03am; Reply: 32
http://www.businessdictionary.com/definition/sanitizer.html

A sanitizer is also anti-fungal. At no point does Sean's specification say that it must be "antibacterial".

But this gets to the larger point I mentioned last week, where SS writers are using harsh and even absurd reasons to say a script failed a criteria.
Posted by: LC, June 18th, 2019, 8:16am; Reply: 33
Hand Sanitizer
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hand_sanitizer

90% alcohol rubs are more effective against viruses than most other forms of hand washing. Isopropyl alcohol will kill 99.99 percent or more of all non-spore forming bacteria in less than 30 seconds, both in the laboratory and on human skin. ... Alcohol rub sanitizers kill most bacteria, and fungi, and stop some viruses.

Have I been unfair?
I'll have to go through all my reviews and check. And I will do, and correct if so.

Btw, Hand Sanitizer is useless against some viruses like norovirus, and certain parasites. Those require good ol' soap and water and bleach and water.

The more pertinent point imho is that hand sanitizer does seem silly in some of the scenarios put forward. Very good scripts/stories and otherwise very good writing is hindered with hand sanitizer as the weapon of choice (on screen) and would likely make me laugh.

Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 8:41am; Reply: 34

Quoted from leitskev
http://www.businessdictionary.com/definition/sanitizer.html

A sanitizer is also anti-fungal. At no point does Sean's specification say that it must be "antibacterial".

But this gets to the larger point I mentioned last week, where SS writers are using harsh and even absurd reasons to say a script failed a criteria.


All the articles I read said they were ineffective against spores and parasite cysts.

From WIki


Quoted Text
Alcohol-based hand sanitizer works against a variety of microorganisms but not spores.


It's not a big deal...I was convinced by the majority to be more lenient, so worry not. I'll pass them all.
Posted by: Gary in Houston, June 18th, 2019, 8:48am; Reply: 35
I think we all need to be a little chill when it comes to logic and horror films. Most of the successful horror films are devoid of solid logic. They’re meant to entertain, not provide dissertations on the chemical capabilities of a hand cleanser. If logic were necessary, movies like Child’s Play, Friday the 13th, or Halloween would never get made. I would focus on whether the hand sanitizer was actually a part of the script (I.e., it wasn’t just sitting on a table as a prop) and less on whether the way it was used applied sound scientific principals, because then you have to dig into the rest of the script and apply the logic. WAIT. SHE KILLED ZOMBIES BY APPLYING HAND SANITIZER ALL OVER YOUR HEAD?? FIRST OF ALL ZOMBIES DONT ACTUALLY EXIST AND IF THEY DID YOU COULDNT.... blah blah blah.

Maybe just read it for the quality of the writing and the entertainment value of the script is all I’m saying.
Posted by: FrankM, June 18th, 2019, 8:51am; Reply: 36

Quoted from Gary in Houston
WAIT. SHE KILLED ZOMBIES BY APPLYING HAND SANITIZER ALL OVER YOUR HEAD?? FIRST OF ALL ZOMBIES DONT ACTUALLY EXIST AND IF THEY DID YOU COULDNT....


You mean I've been stockpiling this stuff for no reason?!
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 8:57am; Reply: 37
I know what you mean, but a lot depends on the style of the story. Like in a supernatural story, supernatural and non rational things can happen, but in a science fiction style story you focus more on the science (especially if the writer mentions it) or in a realistic style horror, things that aren't realistic stand out more.

It's about being consistent with whichever world you're working in.

They're are also levels of selling it.. Like a shot of a bottle saying 95% alcohol, setting up the next part where the burning happens, that kind of thing to make it seem less jarring.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, June 18th, 2019, 9:15am; Reply: 38
All this talk of what hand sanitiser can and can't do is really sucking the fun out of this round
Posted by: ReneC, June 18th, 2019, 9:17am; Reply: 39

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
I know what you mean, but a lot depends on the style of the story. Like in a supernatural story, supernatural and non rational things can happen, but in a science fiction style story you focus more on the science (especially if the writer mentions it) or in a realistic style horror, things that aren't realistic stand out more.

It's about being consistent with whichever world you're working in.

They're are also levels of selling it.. Like a shot of a bottle saying 95% alcohol, setting up the next part where the burning happens, that kind of thing to make it seem less jarring.


All good points, but in 5 pages and 72 hours of writing, that's a feat to accomplish. Kudos to those who do, but I won't knock a script too hard if it falls short of the mark. 5 pages is really hard to squeeze such an unrealistic prop into a horror to begin with.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 9:19am; Reply: 40

Quoted from Matthew Taylor
All this talk of what hand sanitiser can and can't do is really sucking the fun out of this round


You need to drink more hand sanitiser!
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, June 18th, 2019, 9:20am; Reply: 41

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films


You need to drink more hand sanitiser!


Probably tastes better than my homemade wine.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 9:43am; Reply: 42

Quoted from ReneC


All good points, but in 5 pages and 72 hours of writing, that's a feat to accomplish. Kudos to those who do, but I won't knock a script too hard if it falls short of the mark. 5 pages is really hard to squeeze such an unrealistic prop into a horror to begin with.


All true. I'm just chatting in general. The logic thing regarding different genres seems to crop up a lot.
Posted by: khamanna, June 18th, 2019, 11:15am; Reply: 43
I think all we have to do is to choose the fairest reader and follow his opinions on deciding whether the script satisfies the genre criteria or not.

Oh, yes, and that reader obviously should be me.

I'm getting to read the scripts. Surprisingly there are many.
Posted by: ReneC, June 18th, 2019, 11:57am; Reply: 44

Quoted from khamanna
Oh, yes, and that reader obviously should be me.


Obviously.  ;D
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 12:57pm; Reply: 45

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
.

Is Horror Comedy allowed?


Not sure why horror comedy wouldn't be allowed. The requirements were horror, plane, hand sanitizer... horror comedy has horror. It's simply the addition of another genre.

Not to belabor the point... but, if someone writes a horror with a bit too much action... would it then be a horror action, and therefore unqualified?

Just my two cents.
Posted by: Zack, June 18th, 2019, 1:10pm; Reply: 46

Quoted from PKCardinal


Not sure why horror comedy wouldn't be allowed. The requirements were horror, plane, hand sanitizer... horror comedy has horror. It's simply the addition of another genre.

Not to belabor the point... but, if someone writes a horror with a bit too much action... would it then be a horror action, and therefore unqualified?

Just my two cents.


Good points. As long as the horror aspects are taken seriously and not treated as a joke, it should be okay. Just my opinion.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 1:16pm; Reply: 47
Hehe, Fair enough.

Whenever I see the term "horror" on its own, it always puts me in the frame that it's a serious story with a dark tone. Horror comedy seems more at home with comedy, to me. But I accept you're right. I think after having a whole round of horror comedies in round one, I'm biased towards wanting more serious stories.
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 1:25pm; Reply: 48

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
Hehe, Fair enough.

Whenever I see the term "horror" on its own, it always puts me in the frame that it's a serious story with a dark tone. Horror comedy seems more at home with comedy, to me. But I accept you're right. I think after having a whole round of horror comedies in round one, I'm biased towards wanting more serious stories.


I agree on all accounts. I like horror comedy, but got my fill for now in round 1.

Just didn't want some poor writer to get banged on points just for adding something extra.
Posted by: ReneC, June 18th, 2019, 1:55pm; Reply: 49
For all the naysayers about the flammability of hand sanitizer, just check YouTube. There are tons of videos of people lighting the stuff quite easily, and even using it as a fuse.
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 1:59pm; Reply: 50

Quoted from ReneC
For all the naysayers about the flammability of hand sanitizer, just check YouTube. There are tons of videos of people lighting the stuff quite easily, and even using it as a fuse.


There are naysayers? Hmmm. I never doubted it.

Even if I had... it's horror. And, a challenge... I'd just accept it as fact and enjoy the ride.
Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 2:08pm; Reply: 51

Quoted from Zack


Good points. As long as the horror aspects are taken seriously and not treated as a joke, it should be okay. Just my opinion.


yup
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 2:35pm; Reply: 52

Quoted from ReneC
For all the naysayers about the flammability of hand sanitizer, just check YouTube. There are tons of videos of people lighting the stuff quite easily, and even using it as a fuse.


I just looked. Tbh it only convinced me how unlikely it would be to be able to use it as anything like a weapon.  ;D

https://youtu.be/A7k7LeWQ_nI

But we're done with this.. It's taking the fun out of it. My fault. I apologise.
Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 3:20pm; Reply: 53
Because I was active here for years, then inactive for a few, I am in a position to make this observation: the writing and story-making is much, much better now than when I joined in 2011. Go back and read OWC's from that time. There were some good ones, but now there are really no awful ones. Even the stories where the concept didn't quite work, the writing is much better than it was. I know Pia has mentioned the same thing to me in the past.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 18th, 2019, 3:23pm; Reply: 54
I agree, Kev. You used to get scripts that were indecipherable, whereas now all the stories are clear and typos and such are massively reduced.
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 3:27pm; Reply: 55
So, you guys are saying that all this writing/reviewing/talking back and forth is making a difference? Cool.
Posted by: Zack, June 18th, 2019, 3:27pm; Reply: 56

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films
I agree, Kev. You used to get scripts that were indecipherable, whereas now all the stories are clear and typos and such are massively reduced.


I remember when I joined back and 2006, there was some really rough stuff on these boards. Some great stuff back then, too, but the quality has definitely gone up a ton in recent years.


Quoted from PKCardinal
So, you guys are saying that all this writing/reviewing/talking back and forth is making a difference? Cool.


Everything I know about screenwriting and storytelling, I learned here on these boards. Probably never would be a writer if I hadn't stumbled across Simplyscripts when I was in detention my junior year. ;D
Posted by: stevie, June 18th, 2019, 3:36pm; Reply: 57
I joined in late 2008 I think   The pinnacle for the Owc, IMO, was the October 2010 one. There was also a great one in Feb 2011.

A lot of the vets from when I joined aren’t around now and they were awesome writers
Posted by: jayrex, June 18th, 2019, 3:38pm; Reply: 58

Quoted from stevie
I joined in late 2008 I think   The pinnacle for the Owc, IMO, was the October 2010 one. There was also a great one in Feb 2011.

A lot of the vets from when I joined aren’t around now and they were awesome writers


Those were the days.

Good times.
Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 3:47pm; Reply: 59

Quoted from PKCardinal
So, you guys are saying that all this writing/reviewing/talking back and forth is making a difference? Cool.


Maybe. The thing that really helped me, and I am just a C+ student in this talented SS class, was access to pro scripts. I don't read them any more, haven't for years...I focus on prose.

When I first started, as I was absorbing these rules, I knew it didn't make sense to turn general rules into strict ones. Like with 'ing' verbs. I don't just accept instructions without thinking about what makes sense.

Then I started reading pro scripts, good pro scripts, and I learned that literally no pro writes in accordance with some strict version of these rules. I think 20 years ago very few people could get their hands on a good pro-level spec script. Now you can. And as a result the writing is improving, even though people still end up with too-rigid understanding of "rules".

But also for whatever reason some really talented people have showed up in recent years here!

Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 3:48pm; Reply: 60

Quoted from stevie
I joined in late 2008 I think   The pinnacle for the Owc, IMO, was the October 2010 one. There was also a great one in Feb 2011.

A lot of the vets from when I joined aren’t around now and they were awesome writers


Absolutely. But now virtually ALL of the scripts are done well.
Posted by: FrankM, June 18th, 2019, 3:59pm; Reply: 61

Quoted from leitskev


Absolutely. But now virtually ALL of the scripts are done well.


Not ALL of them... ;)
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 4:30pm; Reply: 62

Quoted from Matthew Taylor
All this talk of what hand sanitiser can and can't do is really sucking the fun out of this round


I know right!!
Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 5:02pm; Reply: 63
Alright, round 3 reading, diving in!
Posted by: eldave1, June 18th, 2019, 8:28pm; Reply: 64
Nicely written for the most part. I'd pare back the number of characters - it's already an inherently confusing set-up - the less characters the better.

Felt like I was missing an ending - what did the Orbs mean? It'a only five pages so that is a tough bar to hit - I know
Posted by: LC, June 18th, 2019, 8:31pm; Reply: 65

Quoted from eldave1
Nicely written for the most part. I'd pare back the number of characters - it's already an inherently confusing set-up - the less characters the better.

Felt like I was missing an ending - what did the Orbs mean? It'a only five pages so that is a tough bar to hit - I know

Dave, is this meant to be here, in this thread?

Posted by: Warren, June 18th, 2019, 8:38pm; Reply: 66

Quoted from eldave1
Nicely written for the most part. I'd pare back the number of characters - it's already an inherently confusing set-up - the less characters the better.

Felt like I was missing an ending - what did the Orbs mean? It'a only five pages so that is a tough bar to hit - I know


Excellent review of the thread, Dave :p
Posted by: Gary in Houston, June 18th, 2019, 8:50pm; Reply: 67
I would tell you what the orbs mean, but it would give away which script I wrote.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), June 18th, 2019, 9:07pm; Reply: 68
If there are "orbs", I would think I may have wrote it, but I'd be referring to "large, shapely orbs".   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 10:33pm; Reply: 69

Quoted from Dreamscale
If there are "orbs", I would think I may have wrote it, but I'd be referring to "large, shapely orbs".   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D


I think I’m offended. Am I offended? Can somebody tell me if I’m offended?
Posted by: leitskev, June 18th, 2019, 10:39pm; Reply: 70
You're offended. Outraged.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), June 18th, 2019, 10:43pm; Reply: 71
I'm sure all or most are outraged and offended.  Sorry.

;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 18th, 2019, 11:02pm; Reply: 72

Quoted from leitskev
You're offended. Outraged.


I knew it!
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 19th, 2019, 1:42am; Reply: 73

Quoted from Warren


Excellent review of the thread, Dave :p


;D

Makes it even better that it actually was 5 pages.

Posted by: DustinBowcot (Guest), June 19th, 2019, 1:52am; Reply: 74
Is my part going to be cut?
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, June 19th, 2019, 2:04am; Reply: 75

Quoted from LC

Dave, is this meant to be here, in this thread?



It's supposed to be in the Spores thread. The WW2 fighter plane one... They're fighting alien orbs.

Just so you know...
Posted by: Warren, June 19th, 2019, 5:31pm; Reply: 76
Back for another day of reviews. Let's do this.
Posted by: Warren, June 20th, 2019, 12:32am; Reply: 77
That’s me done for the day. Three to go. A couple of really good ones today. I’ve got to be honest, I didn’t think the pool would be this strong this time round.
Posted by: leitskev, June 20th, 2019, 9:53am; Reply: 78
I saw last week there was a new guy, Kevin S, who lamented that he wasn't connecting to anyone here. So I PM'd him and explained he needed to start reviewing. We've exchanges several messages, and he's now reviewing every script. In the past, everyone always complains about writers who get in but don't review. And I've suggested that it's sometimes a matter of leading the newb into the room a little.

No, I don't know what he wrote and he doesn't know mine. That was not part of the conversation. Just trying to help him get acclimated.
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 20th, 2019, 10:37am; Reply: 79

Quoted from leitskev
I saw last week there was a new guy, Kevin S, who lamented that he wasn't connecting to anyone here. So I PM'd him and explained he needed to start reviewing. We've exchanges several messages, and he's now reviewing every script. In the past, everyone always complains about writers who get in but don't review. And I've suggested that it's sometimes a matter of leading the newb into the room a little.

No, I don't know what he wrote and he doesn't know mine. That was not part of the conversation. Just trying to help him get acclimated.


Kevin's participation stood out to me as well. Glad you pointed it out.

Nice to see.
Posted by: leitskev, June 20th, 2019, 10:54am; Reply: 80
I don't know how many of these I'll participate in the future, PK, but I think if the goal is to get those new writers that submit to start participating, sometimes it's as simple as messaging them and getting them going.
Posted by: PKCardinal, June 20th, 2019, 11:06am; Reply: 81

Quoted from leitskev
I don't know how many of these I'll participate in the future, PK, but I think if the goal is to get those new writers that submit to start participating, sometimes it's as simple as messaging them and getting them going.


I'll keep that in mind going forward and try to pick up the charge if you're not around in a particular challenge.
Posted by: Warren, June 21st, 2019, 12:52am; Reply: 82
Done. I think there are 4 or 5 that are hard to separate for the top spot.

I don’t think there is really a stand out this round, so I'm interested to see where the points land.

Good luck all.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, June 21st, 2019, 8:49am; Reply: 83
I'm all finished

I seem to have awarded a lot more points this round, quite a few at the top of my list with bags full of points lol

My entry however will linger somewhere near the bottom - If it scrapes into the top half it will be a miracle lol
Posted by: stevie, June 21st, 2019, 3:12pm; Reply: 84
Is the scorecard available yet?
Posted by: Zack, June 21st, 2019, 3:21pm; Reply: 85

Quoted from stevie
Is the scorecard available yet?


Check your Pm, Dude. :)
Posted by: AnthonyCawood, June 21st, 2019, 3:25pm; Reply: 86
Stevie - scorecard should be in your Inbox from Don, it was in the message where he announced the round 3 scripts were up...
Posted by: stevie, June 21st, 2019, 3:25pm; Reply: 87
thanks Zack
Posted by: FrankM, June 21st, 2019, 3:39pm; Reply: 88

Quoted from stevie
Cheers bro👍🏻👍🏻


A smidge off-topic (which means it will consume the next seven pages)... Does anybody see the emojis? I just see alphanumeric codes.
Posted by: stevie, June 21st, 2019, 3:42pm; Reply: 89
Yeah sorry Frank my bad   I forgot this happens if I use my iPhone emojis lol
Posted by: Zack, June 21st, 2019, 3:49pm; Reply: 90

Quoted from FrankM


A smidge off-topic (which means it will consume the next seven pages)... Does anybody see the emojis? I just see alphanumeric codes.


I thought maybe Stevie was just having a stroke. lol
Posted by: FrankM, June 21st, 2019, 3:51pm; Reply: 91

Quoted from Zack


I thought maybe Stevie was just having a stroke. lol


The codeword for that is "covfefe"
Posted by: JEStaats, June 21st, 2019, 6:16pm; Reply: 92
Phew, glad I had a day off to catch up. My eyes are bugging out from reading all the entries (except one from last Monday). DONE!

Interesting, though. There are two entries that only have 12 and 13 reviews. WAY behind everyone else.

Some pretty decent entries this round. Surprised since there was so much bitching going on the day before deadline.

Zack - Pretty sure I know which one is yours. If so, diggin' your style, dude. Fun reads.
Posted by: Zack, June 21st, 2019, 7:31pm; Reply: 93

Quoted from JEStaats


Zack - Pretty sure I know which one is yours. If so, diggin' your style, dude. Fun reads.


Thanks, Dude. I just try to let my freak flag fly and have fun with it. ;D
Posted by: leitskev, June 21st, 2019, 8:01pm; Reply: 94
Finished. Re-read a few that I needed to go back to as well.

Only 3 stood out for me. No home runs, but 3 that had a good combo of strengths.
Posted by: LC, June 21st, 2019, 9:37pm; Reply: 95
I notice the Round 3 scoresheet has no DNS category this time around so even with my own entry it gives Y or N criteria-met option and scores of 1 for each category. One point for each sub category regardless of clicking Y or N.

I've read and reviewed all anyway but what does this mean for our own entries when we're not scoring them??



Posted by: FrankM, June 21st, 2019, 9:40pm; Reply: 96

Quoted from LC
I notice the Round 3 scoresheet has no DNS category this time around so even with my own entry it gives Y or N criteria-met option and scores of 1 for each category. One point for each sub category regardless of clicking Y or N.

I've read and reviewed all anyway but what does this mean for our own entries when we're not scoring them??


Don said that his sheet will systematically exclude your score from own average.
Posted by: LC, June 21st, 2019, 9:44pm; Reply: 97
You're right Frank and I should have remembered that.

There's still no DNS for entries not read and reviewed by some though.
I suppose they just get 1s across the board.
Posted by: Warren, June 21st, 2019, 9:54pm; Reply: 98
Anyone spoken to Sean?
Posted by: FrankM, June 21st, 2019, 10:09pm; Reply: 99

Quoted from LC
You're right Frank and I should have remembered that.

There's still no DNS for entries not read and reviewed by some though.
I suppose they just get 1s across the board.


I have four I haven't read yet. Pretty confident I can finish them by Monday, then for the commenting.
Posted by: leitskev, June 22nd, 2019, 2:26pm; Reply: 100
Ok, it's that time again. Where is the link to the voting for round 3?
Posted by: Zack, June 22nd, 2019, 2:31pm; Reply: 101

Quoted from leitskev
Ok, it's that time again. Where is the link to the voting for round 3?


Should be in the last pm Don sent ya. If not, let me know and I'll send you a link.
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