The Cyclops by Jason Jude - Short, Drama - Two soldiers confront their brutal reality on the battlefield. 7 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hey,

There are issues right off the bat that turned me away from this one.

You have camera directions, uncapitalized character names upon introduction, no ages, and the parenthesis are mixed in with the dialogue (not formatted correctly).

Try looking at other scripts for pointers on how to fix these current issues.

Good luck to you.