The People Outside by Steve Fauquier - Horror - A family barricaded in their home tries to survive with dwindling supplies as what's left of humanity threatens to break in. 151 pages - pdf format

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Steve - read several pages - I think you have some talent on display here. However - at 150 pages you're limiting your potential - see if you can't trim it down.

This was not bad at all.


To improve it, I think you can cut down some of the dialogue and add more beats with the outside people in the first half of the script.