Print Topic

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board  /  Short Drama Scripts  /  Safe Place
Posted by: Don, September 30th, 2019, 1:15pm
Safe Place by Simon Parker - Short, Drama - A man who thinks he wants nothing but to be left alone become a father figure to a street worker and her young child. 6 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: MikeCashman, October 7th, 2019, 1:51pm; Reply: 1
Cute story.  Interesting how each character that wanted something when introduced, received something else that satisfied them.  Frank was just looking for sex.  Marie, a prostitute, wants to make money to support herself and her four-year-old daughter, Florence.  How this ends, wasn't predictable, but not surprising either.  What Frank proved to me in the end is that his intentions were overshadowed by his caring heart.  He is a better person than how he was introduced in the beginning of the story.

Some minor grammar issues, misspellings.  Otherwise, a good story.
Print page generated: July 6th, 2020, 1:38pm