Tim Zarus and the New Argonauts by Tim McKenzie - Sci Fi, Fantasy - Amid the chaos and turmoil into which society on Earth has fallen, a young man dreams himself, his two brothers and their dog escaping from the planet by flying their Chevy Equinox minivan into outer space, where they find themselves helping and guiding a noble if motley band of space heroes as they explore a alien dinosaur planet, battle space pirates, and brave an asteroid belt before retrieving a glowing gold ball guarded by an alien dragon on a remote planet. 187 pages - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice :)

You have an extra blank line between your Character and the dialogue - get rid of those.

No reason to put the dialogue in italics