A Pizza Western by William David Glenn IV - Short, Comedy, Western - Two college roommates settle a disagreement over the last slice of pizza through an old fashion duel. 2 pages

production: Two roles. Two locations (a living room and a field). - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Well written and a lot packed into two pages

The story though didn't land for me.

Hi William,

don't have much to say here. The writing is good, the idea is funny and there's nothing really wrong with it.

I guess theoretically there are some things that could be expanded on - You could provide a witty reason why the duel takes so long, that the pizza actually begins to mold, or have the punchline be a bit more elaborate than Wyatt wordlessly throwing away the slice. But in its current state, I think it works as this funny little short and doesn't have to be more than that :-)