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Posted by: Mego73, December 28th, 2019, 4:08pm
My oft revised logline for my space fantasy fairy tail:
Destiny propels princess like heroes into battle with an evil tyrant. All to keep him from abducting refugees from many worlds and destroying all life on a little known, faraway world, that harbors an amazing secret... A world called Earth.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, December 31st, 2019, 11:13am; Reply: 1
Hello - I'm assuming this has nothing to do with the film "The Land That Time Forgot"
Reads a bit messy at the moment.
Who is the protagonist? is there a single princess like hero* driving the narrative?
*Princess like heroes is an odd phrase, what do you mean by it? they are dressed like princesses?
Posted by: eldave1, December 31st, 2019, 4:46pm; Reply: 2
Hello - I'm assuming this has nothing to do with the film "The Land That Time Forgot"
Reads a bit messy at the moment.
Who is the protagonist? is there a single princess like hero* driving the narrative?
*Princess like heroes is an odd phrase, what do you mean by it? they are dressed like princesses? |
Same thoughts for me
Posted by: Mego73, February 26th, 2020, 2:11am; Reply: 3
Thanks both of you. I have since amended it to be "Two princess like heroes" since we are talking about 2.
Posted by: Lightfoot, March 1st, 2020, 8:16pm; Reply: 4
Why say " Two princess like heroes" ? if they act heroic why not just say so?
Two heroic princesses throw themselves in the path of an evil tyrant in order to save a distant world.
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