Dear God, I Quit!  - Love, Satan. by Jay Williams - Short, Comedy - When Satan hands in his resignation letter, God is forced into an impossible situation. 9 pages - pdf format

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So other than having no FADE OUT... there's not much criticism to level at this piece.

On the first read, I thought Godfrey came around from mean and dazed drunk to a very literate and coherent person a bit too quickly... but on the 2nd read, in figuring out who they were, it made more sense.

Very cool idea, very well written, I can see this being very entertaining on the screen. I read Satan as British, and then I read God as British too, and it enhanced my enjoyment.

Nice job.

AJR

Thanks man. They are indeed British. No FADE OUT as it’s the first ten pages of a 60 min pilot.

Vic.

Hey Vic (or Jay?), I thought this was great. Sent you a private message.

NICE.. Very nice. nothing more or less to add.

Thanks guy. It’s a constant struggle, but it would be no fun if this shit was easy.