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Posted by: Don, May 3rd, 2020, 5:34pm
Broken? by Steven Sallie - Short, Drama - A couple on the rocks visits a marriage counselor. 7 pages - pdf format
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Posted by: Arundel, May 4th, 2020, 2:41pm; Reply: 1
Thought this was fairly good. It's dialog driven, wasn't sure where the story was going. By the end it read like something, or a scene, that was part of something bigger. But as for just being what it is, well-written.
The character descriptions of Adam and Sandra didn't seem to for their characters. That's a good thing, as I liked them more than their descriptions would let on. Their talk made them come across more as yuppies, but not in a bad way. It was a plus.
All in all good writing. good dialog, and good description.
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