Cripple Robbers by Simon Parker - Short, Drama - A gangster hires a group of disabled men hoping to turn them into a gang of bank robbers. 9 pages - pdf format

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Well written. Fair story, but for the card thing.. three poor cripples I make out to be living on the street - How was the card delivered / given to them. And as they question what they doing here, it tells us it was just a card with an address = No motivation to wheel chair down there.  

Aiden is quick to curse Lucas for cold blood killing. Yet Aiden then shoots him in the head! Revenge would have been sweeter had they tied him up in the warehouse with a few of the scattered notes and his gun laying on the ground. Calling the cops when they gone.