The Real Deals by Ismahaan - Short, Drama, Comedy - {no logline} 23 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Is this a short or a pilot? Your opening line says it's a pilot Ismahaan.

You need a logline even if just so people who might want to give feedback know what theyre getting into.

At a glance your formatting a little wrong, check out your writing software and make sure it's doing things right.

Let me know you're on the boards and I'll happily give it a full read.

I agree.. No logline tells me you not interested. Why then should a reader be?
You wrote 23 pagers.. at least write a one sentence logline.