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Posted by: Don, August 9th, 2020, 11:27am
Quite A Delicate Minute by Sami Paju - Short, Thriller - Alex abruptly wakes up in a white room and is given a seemingly impossible task that will determine the fate of himself and his daughter. 4 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: BarryJohn, August 10th, 2020, 2:29am; Reply: 1
Yeah... I didn't get it?
--Think I'm due for another coffee.
Posted by: Yuvraj, August 10th, 2020, 2:56am; Reply: 2
I didn't get this.

I mean Alex is arrested, black dude dead and even Joanna is killed. What's the point of this? I don't get it. No real reason as to why Alex's in the room with Mikey. This feels incomplete to me.

Also, no need to introduce Alex as 'the man in white clothes'. Just write his name. He's on-screen.

Honestly, I don't know what to make of this. Maybe someone else might get the story.

Good luck.
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