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Posted by: Don, September 13th, 2020, 10:34am
Reverse Stockholm Syndrome by Viraj Randev - Short, Comedy - Derek falls for his hostage Dwayne, while his partner Jamie tries to snap him out of it. 6 pages - pdf format
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Posted by: Yuvraj, September 13th, 2020, 11:34am; Reply: 1
It was kinda fun reading. Some nice dialogs to savor a laugh. Although there are a lack of punctuation throughout the script(no periods to end the sentences), a couple of typos, and some odd choices for a scene heading.
INT. DEREK'S APARTMENT - LIVING ROOM- COUCH : It has to be a time(DAY OR NIGHT). The couch is a prop.
INT. LIVING ROOM- CORNER- NIGHT: Strange to see CORNER mentioned within a scene heading. Maybe this happens. You can mention it within the action.
Overall, a nice fun read.
Good luck.
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