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Posted by: Don, September 27th, 2020, 10:28am
Black Space by James Austin McCormick - Short, Sci Fi, Fantasy - When an experimental craft warps into an empty void, the crew must work out exactly where they are if they have any chance of returning home. 11 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: The Moviegoer, October 5th, 2020, 12:26pm; Reply: 1
So, spaceship is meant to warp across space but ends up because of a ship design flaw going forward in time to the end of the universe. The crew are stuck with no way back and deal with it in a variety of ways - suicide, getting drunk, an old man dies naturally.

Not sure what the message is here. Is it just a meditation on time, death, the vast unknowability of the universe and life, etc. Doesn't seem to have a resolution.

A lot of the tech-speak is very vague and unconvincing - "let me run some numbers" - but that could be overlooked if the characters were convincing in terms of motivation etc but they seem fairly stock. The captain is the most interesting because he's a bit of a maniac but his storyline ends very suddenly, and none of the other characters really have a storyline or really emit that much interest.

A crew in danger in an unfamiliar part of space and time - has the criteria for a good Star Trek episode but doesn't really deliver on it.
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