Well, it was a close one... but the Killer Dialogue, September Writer's Choice champ is: none other than Dave Lambertson with:

Score - 4 - Unsaid by David C Lambertson (eldave1) writing as Anonymous - Are things truly better left unsaid?
Prompt: You're not the one for me. - Short, Drama

Tied for second place, James and Anthony :

Score - 3.45 - Howard's Jewelry and Loan by James Williams (jwent6688) writing as Blank - A boxer pays a visit to his loan shark after being told he has exactly one hour to settle his outstanding debt.
Prompt: You have exactly one hour - Short, Crime

Score - 3.45 - Connected by Anthony Cawood (AnthonyCawood) writing as Isaac Asimov - What if the point of singularity has already happened and we just don't know about it.
Prompt: You have exactly one hour. - Short, Sci Fi


One for the girls... Taking up third place, good on you, Marnie!

Score - 3.3 - You Can't Force Love by Marnie Mitchell (mmmarnie) writing as Omg Stfu - In search of love, a determined man receives help from a female friend.
Prompt: You're not the one for me. - Short, Rom Com

In fourth spot, nice one, Ben!

Score - 3.25 - …For Dummies by Ben Clifford (AlsoBen) writing as Dr. Steven Brule - A couple planning a special evening for their anniversary have exactly one hour until their guest of honor arrives.
Prompt: You have exactly one hour. - Short, Rom Com

Some really close scores followed, so in no particular order: -

The Night Siren by John Staats (JEStaats) writing as A True Man's Capote - A man comes to the aid of a desperate woman in need.
Prompt: A woman on a ledge. - Short, Crime

Caller Unknown by Warren Duncan (Warren) writing as Anonymous - An emergency call center attendant attempts to talk a young woman off the ledge as she asks him increasingly personal questions.
Prompt: Woman on a ledge. - Short, Drama

Spiro by Rob Herzog (Rob) writing as Buster Scruggs - Two loudmouth gangsters die slowly in a room.
Prompt: Blood everywhere - Short, Crime

Temptation by Owen Herity (Geezis) writing as Max Pipsy - A man and woman debate the fate of the world in a locked room.
Prompt: Things are not what they seem. - Short, Sci Fi

Huberis by Mark Renshaw (markrenshaw) writing as Mean Muddy Funster - A notorious gang leader's self-important is taken down a peg or two when circumstances force him to take a trip in an Uber and he encounters a quirky driver who meticulously obeys the sat nav instructions.
Prompt: I just make up these rules, I have no control over them. - Short, Drama

Clean Slate by Claudio Saez (Claudio) writing as Also Blank - Two brothers catch-up after one of them goes to rehab.
Prompt: It's a dead end. What now? - Short, Drama

Unlawful Duties by Mark Moore (Irisheyes) writing as Bette Davis - Two dirty cops investigate a Hobo in an alley at what cost?
Prompt: It's a dead end. What now? - Short, Thriller

A Very Bad Date by Joe Garza (SPQR) writing as Rocky Custer - A guy's plan to philanderize with his secretary goes awry when his wife shows up -- and then things get much worse.
Prompt: Dead person in a room. - Short, Crime

Safety by Rene Claveau (ReneC) writing as Mr. Bond - When a strange package appears at the door, a couple are at odds about what to do with it.
Prompt: A mysterious parcel is delivered to your house. - Short, Sci Fi

First Call by Mark Dykshoorn (MarkD) writing as Harry Boesch - A rookie police detective experiences his first crime scene investigation with a seasoned partner.
Prompt: Dead person in a room. - Short, Crime


Congrats to Robwith Spiro- a query on this one already. Hope you'll be back for the next OWC.

And special thanks to Greg, Faisal, Jeff, Ghostwriters, Kham, Yuvraj, and anyone else (apologies if I missed you) for contributing to the reading and reviews even though you didn't enter.

Was a fun challenge. Thanks to all for entering.

Congrats Dave, well done mate.

And to James and all the other talented writers on here.

Thanks to Libby of course too.

Congrats! Happy to see one of my favorite entries win~

Congrats, Dave. Some fine placing on the podiums.

I'll admit that I'm pretty bummed Night Siren didn't score better with 100% positive comments but that's what I get for having hopes and dreams. Yeah, I'm a bit shell shocked.

Big congrats to Dave... and to everyone else for a job well done.

A huge congratulations to Don and  Libby! :)

Thanks all. Appreciated

Yours is a terrific script, John. Night Siren Was one of my top picks. I agree on the Sin City, Love Death and Robots type graphic style.

Congrats, Dave, well deserved and not surprising. You are the master of dialogue.

Congrats, Dave! It's a great script.

Thanks to Libby and Don for putting this one together. It was fun. Lightning fast reads with all that white on the page.

James

Thanks guys. A lot of good scripts in this one.

Thanks Libby and Don
One if my favorite OWCs.

Quoted from eldave1 Thanks all. Appreciated

Dave,

If you would PM me an address where one might receive a standard business envelope about the size and weight and thickness of a very, very detailed, six to eight page, single spaced letter detailing all the reasons you should not be a screenwriter (with footnotes).

Thanks,

Don

Yay!

Congratulations, Dave! Very well deserved. Unsaid was a brilliant story.

Congratulations, James! Yours was indeed a well-crafted piece of screenwriting.

Congrats, Anthony, Marnie, Ben, and all the writers who entered this OWC. Great work!

Special mention to John. "The Night Siren" was the best for me (no disrespect to any other script intended).

Well done Dave, Anthony,  James and Marnie! Superb entries all around.

Congratulations Dave, very well done. Have to admit I thought your entry was the strongest, just :-). There were some stories in the challenge I really enjoyed.
Mucho kudos to everyone who entered, I thought it was a varied and interesting exercise with some great dialogue and unusual visuals (a Willy Wonka statue made of testicles).
Here’s to the next one.

Well done everyone.  

This was a different OWC, an excellent one. And every script that I read stood out. Just a big wow for all. And congrats to all.

Congratulations. Your script was my undisputed number one.

Thank you all!

Quoted from eldave1 Thank you all!

Well done, Dave.

Surely by now, you have enough Simplyscript mugs to open up a Simplyscripts cafe?

Quoted from JEStaats Congrats, Dave. Some fine placing on the podiums. I'll admit that I'm pretty bummed Night Siren didn't score better with 100% positive comments but that's what I get for having hopes and dreams. Yeah, I'm a bit shell shocked.

John, was yours the one with the .45 caliber nipples?  I think it was and as I read that, I thought it must be yours.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor Well done, Dave. Surely by now, you have enough Simplyscript mugs to open up a Simplyscripts cafe?

Thanks Matt - I have an even set of six now.  That's what you get from being around forever!

Quoted from Dreamscale John, was yours the one with the .45 caliber nipples?  I think it was and as I read that, I thought it must be yours.

I was channeling my inner Jeff. ;D

It's talent Dave, not longevity!

Quoted from AnthonyCawood It's talent Dave, not longevity!

Ah, thanks mate.

A six pack!? That's mighty impressive.

Excellent Dave

Well done!  

Quoted from irish eyes Excellent Dave Well done!

Thanks!

Congrats, Dave! Great entry!

Kudos to all who entered. The scripts were very entertaining reads.

Quoted from greg Congrats, Dave! Great entry! Kudos to all who entered. The scripts were very entertaining reads.

Thanks!

Congrats, Dave.

And props to everyone who participated.  

Also, thanks for the special mention, Libby. Hopefully, I will participate soon. Hopefully...

Quoted from Yuvraj Congrats, Dave. And props to everyone who participated.   Also, thanks for the special mention, Libby. Hopefully, I will participate soon. Hopefully...

Thanks, mate

I know the others that don't have the score listed are in no particular order, but it seems mine was listed last for a reason... Great script eldave and congrats on Writers Choice!

Quoted from MarkD I know the others that don't have the score listed are in no particular order, but it seems mine was listed last for a reason... Great script eldave and congrats on Writers Choice!

Thanks,  Mark

All,

My sincerest apologies to Claudio.  I made a huge mistake for which I am very sorry.  It was Rob Herzog's "Spiro" that was queried during the challenge.

Congratulations Rob and apologies again to Claudio.

Don