One Morning at the Restroom by Nico Aaron - Short, Thriller - A man and a woman find themselves inside a restroom during a workplace shooting, but what they'll find out about each other is probably not what either of them expected. 11 pages - pdf format

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You have a kernel of a good premise. BUT....

There are tons of typos and grammatical errors - far too many to list - try using Gramerly - it's free.

The dialogue is not at all natural.

For example, here:

Quoted Text PAULA No, No I'm not. (beat) Do you-- do you know who's doing this? LEWIS Who's doing what?

Wo's doing what??? The place is being shot up and he's escaped into a restroom - Of course he knows what "what" is. Several places like this where it doesn't make any sense.

The ending is rather pointless.  Think of something more clever - twisty.