Wait Till Next Year by Paul Knauer - Comedy, Family, Sports - His career stalling, a small-town radio play-by-play talent decides to lift the downtrodden town, and his career prospects, by calling the winless high school basketball team to a mythical championship. 102 pages - pdf format

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Very clever, Paul.

I read straight through - writing was excellent. Only thing I could offer as I thought Edwards offer to Lynn to leave town with him was a little early in their relationship.

Nice little story you have here. Very smooth read.

Has this changed much from when I read it?

Quoted from eldave1 Very clever, Paul. I read straight through - writing was excellent. Only thing I could offer as I thought Edwards offer to Lynn to leave town with him was a little early in their relationship. Nice little story you have here. Very smooth read.

Thanks, Dave. Appreciate the comments.

I'll look and see if I can move that particular moment any.

Quoted from Warren Has this changed much from when I read it?

I can't remember exactly when I shared it with you... but, I don't think it's much different, if at all.

I've moved on to my next feature rather than go through another rewrite on this one.

I think this is at the "tweak around the edges phase." Definitely not worth another read for you.

And, if anyone else takes a gander, they could keep that in mind: notes like Dave's are what I'm hoping for. Anything too big at this point is unlikely to happen for now.

Thanks for asking, and for the earlier read!!

Quoted from PKCardinal I can't remember exactly when I shared it with you... but, I don't think it's much different, if at all. I've moved on to my next feature rather than go through another rewrite on this one. I think this is at the "tweak around the edges phase." Definitely not worth another read for you. And, if anyone else takes a gander, they could keep that in mind: notes like Dave's are what I'm hoping for. Anything too big at this point is unlikely to happen for now. Thanks for asking, and for the earlier read!!

No problem. I look forward to reading your next one :)