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Posted by: Don, September 17th, 2021, 4:44pm
Stop him! by Niall Byrne - Short, Horror, Comedy - A man finds out sometimes its better not to be a hero. 3 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: Zack, September 18th, 2021, 10:50am; Reply: 1
Shouldn't this be in the horror shorts section?
Posted by: Don, September 18th, 2021, 3:22pm; Reply: 2

Quoted from Zack
Shouldn't this be in the horror shorts section?


Yes. Yes it should.

- Don
Posted by: Yuvraj, September 19th, 2021, 6:42am; Reply: 3
Hey, Niall, gave this a read.

Overall, I liked the use of a loop pattern here to convey the moral of the story that - not everything is true that meets the eye. The writing was also nice and easy to follow. No hiccups there. Although, the title page alignment is slightly off in regards to the margins, easily fixable.  

A decent effort, I would say.

Good luck.  
Posted by: ColinS, September 21st, 2021, 5:38pm; Reply: 4
Liked the concept of this one. Short and sweet.
Writing was good. Flowed well!
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