Catch by Rob Herzog - Short, Horror - David regrets playing catch with his dead father.  6 pages - pdf format

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I enjoyed this.

Quoted from eldave1 I enjoyed this.

Thank you for reading.

That was an intriguing read - Loved the writing.

I was left thinking maybe it was never his dad, maybe the evil force (demonic) that got his dad to do those bad thing in the first place.

In any case, interesting stuff -  Good work.

Hey Rob,

Spoliers..

At first I was thinking it doesn't seem legit that he would get up and do that sober. I felt like it needed just a touch more backstory i.e he's been heavily drinking that night so is still drunk. OR that he is sleep walking, then he wakes up after a few catches and is like is this real? am I really playing catch with you?
Yes I am... wow,,,.

Great twist with the with the baseball action. He's in danger now, realizing mom was right and dad was everything they said he was. I like that he is seeing his mum  - meaning he's about to die.

Nice job, it's original and well written...

Hi Rob,

The story was somewhat offbeat (to me at least) so it took me a while to fully grasp it.

An unexpected ending for sure, however, I felt unsatisfied after reading it. Maybe I didn't get it. Idk.

Anyways, good luck.

Good twist at the end.  Exposition on pages 3 and 4 though why not just show David playing high school baseball in a scene instead of telling us?
   Also I would have liked to have learned why the Dad left  the family  and how did he die?