Good Bad by Wade Sharp - Short, Drama - A low-level thief trying to avoid violence finds out he's got a real aptitude for it. 14 pages - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice :)

Hello there,

I read Good Bad and really quite enjoyed it. It's funny, I like the set up - this odd coupling of these two addict thieves on the hunt for a score, one of them being wheeled about in his wheelchair lol.

The dialogue was comical, witty, it worked for me a treat.

Perhaps a little more distinction between the way Max and Country speak could have added to  it.

Not sure you need some of the 'point of views' you have in the action when they are searching the cars. But didn't have any problems with the writing as a whole - A really easy read! And that's a real positive.

Not entirely sure about the title, and you should probably have 'fade out' or 'the end' on the last page.

But seriously - Enjoyable short this, well done.