True Criminals by Robert Bryce Milburn and Richard Adrian - Comedy, Crime - Two farce criminals take the fall for a celebrity's death in order to profit off of a Hollywood buyout. 149 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Just read the first ten and loved it! Greatly scripted thus far and the characters are amusing.

I Like it a lot. in fact I'm going to read it again.  I also have a series of shorts on two characters from my 8-book Dan Marlowe/Hampton Beach, NH Crime Series.  Eddie Hoar & Derwood Doller are two bumbling, low-life beach hustlers.I don't like farce in  yourlog line, though.  How about blundering, bumbling or other, instead?  I'll let you know any other thoughts after 2nd read through. later today or tomorrow.
Best,
jed Power

Quoted Text INT. POLICE BREAK ROOM - NIGHT Two grubby redneck brothers, DARYL (38) and DAX (35), sit beside each other at a table. Quiet. Unmoving. A cigarette hangs from Daryl’s lips. Dax fondles a zippo. Detectives, Glenn (45) and Kelley (44), sit opposite. Documents surround their space. Kelley presses record and slides his tape recorder to the center of the table. Daryl takes a puff and leans in--

You need to CAP GLEN and KELLY when first intro'd.

Are these there first or last names?

Are they male or female?

Well, this never got made as a movie, but we did end up writing it into a novel!

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