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Posted by: Ragulmaran, October 31st, 2022, 11:54am
Newly married indian wife who is having arousal disorder, anorgasmic has to perform the stage drama on the topic (The drama of lust).
Posted by: Desmond, November 6th, 2022, 9:18am; Reply: 1
Needs to be changed to
"Newly married Indian wife who is having an orgasmic arousal disorder, has to perform the stage drama on the topic (The drama of lust)." But looks ok to me. Might beef it up a little bit though.
Posted by: Ragulmaran, January 5th, 2023, 2:43am; Reply: 2
A woman struggling with arousal disorder must confront her own desires and insecurities when she is cast as the lead in a provocative stage drama about lust."
Posted by: ChrisBodily, January 5th, 2023, 3:08am; Reply: 3
Both look good to me. This seems to tell me everything I need to know, and I'd love to find out more. Don't know what else I can say about it.
Posted by: LC, January 5th, 2023, 4:32am; Reply: 4

Quoted from Ragulmaran
A woman struggling with arousal disorder must confront her own desires and insecurities when she is cast as the lead in a provocative stage drama about lust."


We need a title please, even if just a working title. All Logline review requests need a title for easy reference.
Edit your post to reflect this or I can do it for you, no probs.

Posted by: eldave1, January 5th, 2023, 11:18am; Reply: 5

Quoted from Ragulmaran
A woman struggling with arousal disorder must confront her own desires and insecurities when she is cast as the lead in a provocative stage drama about lust."


Maybe rather than A woman - An actress
Posted by: LC, January 8th, 2023, 7:29am; Reply: 6
Ragulmaran, FYI, I merged your two threads and have given you a title for easy reference.
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