Logline: A disgraced detective confronts a charming politician at the behest of his second chance giving mentor.
I would appreciate feedback regarding my script. Mainly revolving around the following questions:
Do I have a clear want/need and conflict in my story?
Any advice regarding the structure of the work?
Do I have much subtext? How can I include more of it? A part of me feels that since this has been written to be a short story I can get away with not having as much? Am I correct here?
Are there any characters or scenes that you think I should remove or cut? I am aware that this script is quite wordy but kind of stuck with what to cut since I feel like I payoff alot of what I reveal in Act 1?
As always I will keep refining my SPAG with each draft.
Link to script:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Rr_2V0piDpwbDe-kKdkVp96YNAnRo24O/view?usp=sharing