The Cornfield by Timothy Moore - Short, Horror - When a farmer is enjoying looking at his cornfield, he has no clue what horror is coming for him many yards away. 3 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

The next time I get stuck in a thunderstorm, I’m going to be looking at the ground instead of the sky.

Your imagery and pacing moved the story along well.

However, I think the story was a little too short. It would have been scarier if the farmer had received some kind of cryptic warning not to do something, then did it anyway. For instance, if he found a shiny coin or medallion in the field and when he picks it up, a voice in the wind whispers, “Put it back.” He puts it in his pocket instead and at that point, the clouds form and so on.

Also, I don’t think a farmer would drop the F bomb. They tend to be church going Baptists who say things like “Criminy!”, “Dagblum!” and “Doggonit!”
Just a thought.

You follow most of the rules of Standard Format but the first mistake I found was that when introducing a new character, you need to type it in all caps. This also applies to extras.

Also,  your style could improve a little. For example:
You wrote “A farmer, who’s in his 40s, wears a…” could be a little more efficient. Most people would write: “A FARMER (40s), wears a …”.   It’s cleaner and reads more quickly.

Thank you for reading my script and I do appreciate the tips. I will put those to good use on my future screenplays.

Tim