the shelve by caleb stutheit - Short, Horror - a mans shelve breaks and he needs a new one 2 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Ok. Where do I even start?

Grammatical and punctuation problems all over the place. Sounded to me like this person hates books, rather than like. Thank heavens it was only two pages, but thanks for sharing anyways. I realize it's a long road to finding the right formula in screenplay writing and we all have our own idiosynchrasies. Carry on writing though, it will get better.