Dead Serious by Chuck Conaway - Short, Dramedy - Hitman en-route a contract assignment picks up a stranded motorist who turns out to be a Serial Killer. 8 pages - pdf format

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Are you serious?!

I feel like I've been slapped in the face with a wet fish.

This could be so much better, if you'd have introduced a drawn out mind game with Webb and Kresko.

A couple of little typos in there also.

Page 5 - "Why no motel?"

"Kresko toys with him" (Show don't tell)

It just felt a little rushed to me, but enjoyed the read.

Thanks.

Stoney, the Writer doesn't want comments on this one. I'll leave it up for now but if the Writer objects I'll take it down. Likewise if there are other comments.