SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board / Romantic Comedy / Sort of a Chicago Love Story
Posted by: Don, September 23rd, 2023, 9:48am
Sort of a Chicago Love Story by Scott Sawitz - Romantic Comedy - Five years after a college hookup, a comic and an investment banker reconnect and spend a night to see if their connection in college was for one night or eternity. 101 pages - pdf format
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Posted by: eldave1, September 24th, 2023, 11:27am; Reply: 1
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EXT. UNIVERSITY OF WISCONSIN AT MADISON - NIGHT
Establishing.
The night before graduation.
In the header you don't need at Madison
You don't need Establishing... Instead use that line to describe what we are looking at.
Night before graduation should really be a SUPER
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INT. DORM LOBBY - NIGHT
The sound of a woman sobbing radiates.
Go - Noun - Verb - Object
e.g.,
A WOMAN'S SOB echoes in the room
GRACE DALTON (22) looks around.
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She has long, dark hair, soul piercing eyes and an impossibly posh British accent.
Soul pirecing eyes is a bit tropey.
What is she looking around at ? Does her hair color matter?
Push yourself here - give us a description that really gives us some insight into your character.