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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board  /  My Work In Progress  /  The Adamant - 32 pages - animated pilot script
Posted by: scrawlx101, November 7th, 2023, 4:22pm
Link to Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1erHMq1cDGX9xZyTx1Z7bx6BP_ycaO_G-/view?usp=sharing
So I feel pretty pleased with this first draft I wrote, I think the storyline is interesting.
LOGLINE: When a young man sees his mother killed by a member of the notorious Roundtable, he will stop at nothing to pursue revenge, even if it means using his newfound associates to get there by any means necessary.
Would appreciate feedback on the following:
Do I have a clear beginning, middle and end?
Is it clear who's story this is?
Are the stakes established clearly in the story?
Is there a satisfying resolution?
What do you think the main character's flaw is?
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