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Following the death of their matriarch, a Hawaiian family reunites at her home to pay tribute to her life and confront long-standing conflicts between them.

This reads fine, if a little light on whatever the stakes might be?
Is it just a family drama? Anything (apart from the Hawaii setting) to make it stick out from the crowd?

What Libby said. Where’s the stakes and the conflict? Basically, exactly what are the stakes and conflict? As is, all we know is that there are some issues to sort through. Don’t have a main character here who’s the focus of this family drama? Then we need to know that too, along with what the conflict is.

Steve