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Posted by: Poiboy1935, January 28th, 2024, 9:14pm
Here's my Logline.


Deecee the daughter of a famous rock and roll star is a child singer. A junior high student and is distraught from a child hood friend.
Posted by: LC, January 28th, 2024, 10:41pm; Reply: 1
This doesn't read very well mainly due to a lack of info - needs fleshing out, and the sentence construction could do with some work. You appear to have a full-stop in the middle of a run on idea.

I'm guessing your story contains something similar to:

Charts the life of the daughter of a famous rock and roll star.
Has to live up to his reputation/big shoes to fill.
Dealing with instant fame herself.
While navigating everyday challenges of school life, BFFs, bullies, petty jealousies, etc.

Like I said, just guessing.

You do need a name for this one in the thread title, so unless you advise otherwise I'm calling it Deecee.
Just so it doesn't get lost amongst all the other loglines.
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