I Tried Therapy by Hrant Ahanisyan - Short, Dramedy - A delusional man gathering courage to admit he needs help. 15 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Thanks for getting my script online, Don.

This script does have some issues in the way it is written. Firstly, you need to proofread the whole script from top to bottom.

Secondly, you don't need to keep repeating your slug lines.

Beat.

Then move on with action lines.

Thd narrative is quite cool and I really did have empathy with the Therapist, but not so much with his father - the Client.

You have some decent observations with the ring finger touching, and the looking out of the window, and even a touch of OCD in there which I thought was interesting in character building.

I understand it takes courage to come out of the closet and I applaud you for posting this story from your vantage an view point.

Thanks for sharing.

Hi! Sorry I just saw this your comment. Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated!

Yes, I agree about the slug lines, I put them there intentionally to make the beats clear for myself but I should have taken them out before uploading.

Did you feel like the ending is satisfying, in that is gives a point to the opening and the story? I'd appreciate your thoughts on that.

Thanks,
Hrant