Good job, brother!  You did a great job with this and I knew it would be a contender, and finishing .02 points out of 3rd place...and .02 points ahead of this Kid, is something to be proud of.

I agree that this should be reworked and looked at, as it has alot going for it.

Nice work...and as I teased you before the scripts were even written, you were due for a good showing!     HaHa!!  You delivered.

Bro sorry I missed this!

Starts off like a female 'Young guns' pretty cool.
The downside to having one genre scripts is the element of surprise...like the young girl I typically I thought the rider was a man too but of course...

This dialogue really threw me off from the tone you set.

CORA
             Tell me..please tell me who you are.
                         HOPE
             I was there that day.
                         CORA
             Please...I'm dying...I need to know.

Cora seemed like a mean bitch and also tried to blast a hole through Hope a fews seconds earlier.  A think a more ' Who the fuck are you bitch?' without any reply or a boot pressed to her throat would have been suffice.

The action and dialogue throughout has been fast paced... great writing.


Overall a great read Steve and one of the better entries, I'm sorry again I missed it.

Oh wow, she was a ghost???? The thought crossed my mind briefly as I was trying to figure out who she was but I dismissed it cause no evidence seems to have shown that she was. If you're going the High Plains Drifter route you need to play that supernatural aspect up somehow. have her clearly get shot at the end but unharmed for example. Tricky but needed since I had no idea she was supernatural.

But still one of my favs!