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Great story ideas you can't find an ending for...   (reply) Posted by: FrankM
Date Posted: Today, 9:14pm

Quoted from eldave1
I have one of those "special problems" now - I think I have a solid concept/premise - but am stuck on the execution.


Look carefully at your keyboard. The next letter you're supposed to type is right there. Just have to figure out which one it is, then the ones following it.

Simple, right?
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Cows Attack! Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 7:20pm
Cows Attack! by Doug Tesch - Short, Family, Children, Comedy - The Far Side meets Mars Attacks. 10 pages - pdf format

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Second Chance Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 7:19pm
Second Chance by Christopher J Vecchio - Dramedy - Diane is almost 50 and looking for love along with searching for her birth parents. Will she have a second chance of happiness? 111 pages - pdf format

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Just a Load of Baloney Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 7:19pm
Just a Load of Baloney by Kirsten James - Short, Dramedy - When a student saves another from a bully they end up having to face their own fears and stereotypes of each other. 8 pages - pdf format

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Dishes of Color Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 7:19pm
Dishes of Color by Fausto Lucignani - Drama - After learning from an elderly Italian woman the secrets of  Italian cooking, a strong-willed African-American home aide opens a small restaurant in an Italian neighborhood, unaware that the†local Mafia bosses deeply abhor the color of her skin. 107 pages - pdf format

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Oligopoly Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 7:18pm
Oligopoly by Tyler Snow - Drama - A David Simon-esque drama about six super powered families fighting for control of the largest drug territory in the world. 60 pages - pdf format

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Tunnel Rat - the comic   (reply) Posted by: Angry Bear
Date Posted: Today, 6:09pm
I agree! Awesome work! I remember that short too. One of my favorites from that OWC.
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Tunnel Rat - the comic   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Today, 5:53pm
Awesome work. Something to be proud of.
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Tunnel Rat - the comic Posted by: JEStaats
Date Posted: Today, 5:48pm
Thanks to Mark and his posting of Cyborn - the comic, I ventured down the rabbit hole and re-wrote Tunnel Rat into comic format. Hyper Epics liked it, we pitched it to an illustrator, and, one month later, posted.

https://www.hyperepics.com/tunnel-rat

I've already rewritten four others and have another being drawn already. I hope you like it!

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Don's Edit:

Link to the OWC entry - Tunnel Rat - http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1533388682/s-0/

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Great story ideas you can't find an ending for...   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Today, 5:41pm

Quoted from MarkRenshaw
In my experience collaborating with a few creative people, the problem is people have really great ideas but struggle to form them into compelling stories with satisfying endings. Someone could say (which someone did to me recently) ďHow about a guy with a tumour on his head that holds the cure to cancer, but he goes on the run because to extract the cure would kill him. Everyone is after it and he canít hide anywhere. Ē Great I said, itís like Fugitive meets Running Man, tell me more. So he did and it started off great but started to fall apart at the middle.  The ending wasnít even a consideration at that point so he just trailed off at what would be around page 50.

So until you have a beginning, middl
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: FrankM
Date Posted: Today, 4:19pm
I canít tell you the right way to make the setup your own, but I can tell you how I did it in my current draft.

Instead of a museum or traditional gallery, I have some eccentric old-money gazillionaire who patronizes artists. The ďcuratorĒ is showing the new batch of artists the ropes by explaining some of the pieces made by the artists before them.

At this point it is still pretty half-baked as a wraparound, but already itís not the same as the TV show.
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: PrussianMosby
Date Posted: Today, 3:31pm
"you create your own art and you create your own stories"

the series did that everytime, to invent a new story and picture. And you said the challenge also demands the curator introduction. So, no bullshit, give me an example to understand.


edit: That's what you were saying about the intro:

"The host, Rod Serling, would introduce three paintings per episode and each painting had a story attached to it.

For your feature-length script, you're doing the same set-up: a host will introduce between three and five paintings.
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: Mr. Blonde
Date Posted: Today, 3:14pm

Quoted from PrussianMosby
Sean, right?,...
If you want an introduction through a curator and the segments about the art works, then, whats our own take?

To me it's exactly the show as an feature. Can you give an example, please?


You write your own introductions, you create your own art and you create your own stories.
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: PrussianMosby
Date Posted: Today, 3:04pm
Sean, right?,...
If you want an introduction through a curator and the segments about the art works, then, whats our own take?

To me it's exactly the show as an feature. Can you give an example, please?
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Inescapable   (reply) Posted by: MatthewLincoln
Date Posted: Today, 10:57am
Hi everyone,

Just want to let everyone know that a re-write for Inescapable is coming soon.  It's mostly to clean some things up. I'll post it soon.

Matthew Lincoln
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Question about series of shots/using music   (reply) Posted by: The Dark Horse
Date Posted: Today, 10:33am

Quoted from Mr. Blonde


As a result, if I want something in the script, I'm going to put it in there and if you want to change that, you're going to have to buy it from me.


Thanks

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Doubleblind   (reply) Posted by: Dustin
Date Posted: Today, 2:49am

Quoted from AlanM
I do have a longer written "pitch" but thought I was limited by the parameters of this site to one line.


You should be able to add more information and keep it to one line. The 'one line' thing isn't a valid excuse.
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: Mr. Ripley
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:49pm
I already got my stories. Just need to put it down on paper.

Gabe
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Doubleblind   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Yesterday, 3:13pm

Quoted from AlanM
Thank you for the feedback. I was using Screenwriter Software that auto-populated characters in caps. I do have a longer written "pitch" but thought I was limited by the parameters of this site to one line. I'll check to see if I can upload the longer version.  Cheers Alan


You're welcome - best of luck
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: Mr. Blonde
Date Posted: Yesterday, 3:13pm

Quoted from pale yellow
10-4 boss... I got nuthin but time now, so I'm in.


Had a feeling you might have a change of heart, now. So, naturally, we can expect your draft in two or three days, right? =)
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The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge.   (reply) Posted by: pale yellow
Date Posted: Yesterday, 2:56pm

Quoted from Mr. Blonde


Feature screenplay utilizing three to five vignettes with a wraparound segment included.


10-4 boss... I got nuthin but time now, so I'm in.
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Doubleblind   (reply) Posted by: AlanM
Date Posted: Yesterday, 2:43pm
Thank you for the feedback. I was using Screenwriter Software that auto-populated characters in caps. I do have a longer written "pitch" but thought I was limited by the parameters of this site to one line. I'll check to see if I can upload the longer version.  Cheers Alan
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Zaltha   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Yesterday, 2:29pm
Chris: you may have uploaded the wrong version.

Title page is a mess, there is no opening scene heading, a blank page at the beginning, etc.
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CandyCellers   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Yesterday, 2:27pm
Don't do this:


Quoted Text
EXT. WOMENíS CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - SALEM, OREGON - NIGHT
(SUMMER 197.

Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination
encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked
barracks.


Do this:

EXT. WOMENíS CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - NIGHT

Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination
encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked
barracks.

SUPER: SALEM, OREGON - SUMMER, 1978

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Warning Shot   (reply) Posted by: Demento
Date Posted: Yesterday, 1:18pm

Quoted from Breanne Mattson
For example; their hands were tied behind their backs. I was frustrated when the decision was made to have their hands tied in front for the convenience of the actors.


Well... that's just ridiculous.
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He Harm Many   (reply) Posted by: Equinox
Date Posted: Yesterday, 1:03pm
Hey Adam,

just gave this a read, here some notes I took:

- First of all, proof read this. Lots of typos (several ones in each sentence) and lots of grammar issues too. Also lots of format problems. I'll not get into details as they're just too many and you probably know you have some work to do here. I'm not sure, but I would guess you're not a native english speaker after reading this.

- I don't like Jamie talking to herself all the time to get the story across. That's a cheap way of doing this, because she's not talking to herself but to the reader here. Try to find a more subtle way of letting us know her boyfriend died and she couldn't help him. Why not let her visit his tomb or something? Just and idea, I guess you...

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Warning Shot   (reply) Posted by: Breanne Mattson
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:55pm
***WARNING: POSSIBLE SPOILERS***

Chris,

Thank you so much for checking the film out and taking the time to let me know what you think. It really means a lot.

I canít really say I disagree with anything youíve said. The only thing I can really add is to say some of your points were addressed in the script. For example; their hands were tied behind their backs. I was frustrated when the decision was made to have their hands tied in front for the convenience of the actors.

I certainly donít want to pass blame. Every film has flaws no matter how hard you try. Under the circumstances, Iím confident everyone did their best.

I accept all the reviews; good, bad, or indifferent. The only thing that has really disap...

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The Predator (2018)   (reply) Posted by: James McClung
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:20pm
I haven't seen Predator 2 in some time, but it always struck me as the most logical progression from the previous film. They kept the plot simple but not a carbon copy of the original. The biggest change is in the scenery, which seems superficial, but the city setting provides just enough new elements for a fresh dynamic. You don't learn much more about the Predator, but you get to see the spaceship, which is a taste. Isn't the character better off mysterious? A responsible follow-up, I think, albeit not the most memorable.


Quoted from Heretic
SPOILERS FOR ONLY THIS PREDATOR FILM: I guess a grey area? There is a Predator character that is, er, sympathetic to the human cause. However, it does not meaningfully "team up" with human
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CandyCellers   (reply) Posted by: ChrisV
Date Posted: Yesterday, 11:26am
I'm no expert and waiting for my first script to post. I read the first six pages and noticed spelling errors. I get the dialogue uses a lot of slang, but I feel the ACTION LINES should use proper grammar/spelling. As I said, I'm no expert and still finding grammar and spelling issues even after going over my script 3-4 times.

ALSO...if you're using Amazon's free Story Writer, I've noticed after I corrected errors, I go back and the original errors reappear days later.  >

GOOD LUCK!
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Flytrap   (reply) Posted by: Anon
Date Posted: Yesterday, 8:21am

Quoted from Dreamscale


...this "cheap as shit" vacation house for $175/night outside Winter Park.  



I did the season in Winter Park. Loved it. Are you writing from experience, Sean?
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