Read the whole thing and I have just a few points.
First of all, I thought the story was interesting, so good job on that. And I had an easy time reading through it due to your writing, which always makes it a little easier to get through things!
In saying that, some places you do a little more writing than you need to. For instance, on page 4 you write:
Stein sits on the ground carving a notch in the wooden
buttstock of his M1 rifle. All together there are a total of
eight notches signifying the number of German Soldiers he has
This was just after they killed some Nazi soldiers. When you wrote the first sentence there, I knew exactly what he was doing. Seeing the eight notches was nice, but there's no need to write it signifies the number of soldiers he's killed. That first sentence painted the picture pretty well.
There's a few more instances like that throughout, where there's a little over writing. Not much mind you, but enough that I noticed.
On page 23 you wrote:
The scene is hectic. SCIENTISTS in white lab coats scurry
about making final adjustments. The Squad walk around the
Saucer-shaped Craft in the center of the room.
You say the scene is hectic, then go onto say how the scene is hectic. Just show us how it's hectic, and that first sentence could be abolished all together.
You use the word "then" a lot. Not that it's a bad word to use, it's just how you use it. It kind of slowed the read down for me. For example, page 65:
Just then, thereís a low RUMBLE coming from the forest edge.
A cavalry unit of Nazi Knights BURSTS from behind the wall of
trees to the side of the battlefield.
The "Just then" frustrates me a little, because when else is it going to be? If you're writing it, it's happening right now. Know what I mean?
You have many more instances like that where you use "then", and it really sticks out like a sore thumb. The reason I say that is because the rest of your writing really flows. So maybe take a look at it.
On page 105:
Fitzgerald pushes her back and they both fall to the floor.
Nazi Soldiers behind him begin to move but freeze when Krahe
Back! Heís mine.
This seems a little reversed. Maybe you should have her actually yell before you have them freeze. I know what you mean, but it reads like they freeze, then she yells. Now, I doubt anyone would actually film it like that, but you get the picture. it's nit picky, but just something I noticed.
On page 107 the scenes are a little confusing. You write that there's a spark of light... in both scenes with Hitler. Are we seeing the same spark? Or did Turner shoot twice?
That's all I've got for you. These are just minor things that I noticed. I enjoyed the plot, thought it was executed well. However, I'm not sure about the atomic bomb at the end. That seems a little extreme.
Anyhow, good luck with it!