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Uh oh! Jeff's drinking on the boards again! Insanity usually ensues.
Anyway, Alex, as for the stalking scenes... I don't think you want too much, if any, repetetive scenes, unless you are doing something like the element in 'Groundhog Day'.
Do you really think you need 3 or 4 scenes to show that this guy's been stalking this girl for awhile? Or is there a way you can write it so that you can just show it once and the audience can figure out he's been doing this for awhile?
Also, is this a short or a feature? 3 or 4 of the same exact scenes will get annoying in a feature, and I don't even want to think about it in a short.
Any scene you write, should be made out of choice, not by way of perceived necessity.
Perceived necessity:I must use multiple scenes to show this guy following the girl, or the reader/audience will not understand he has been stalking for some time.
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Choice: Or, I could use one scene to convey the same information- now what method fits that - and work from there.
For example, if we see a guy lurking in the bushes and check a diary, or phone, with a list of times and places, the last place on that list, where he just happens to be, then . . . cue girl, I think we'll figure out she's being stalked.
. . . that fear of being watched . . . it's the sole reason I don't take part in forum discussions
All the advice has been great and I have undecided between 2 alternatives.
Option 1. The girl walks along the path with a shadow of a stalker watching her closely, every so far a quickflash appears showing her walking the same path on a different day, until the final part of this scene where she it taken.
Option 2. Showing an initial scene where the girl walks along the path, including the intricacies of where she repeats the same action (mentioned by babz) cross at this location, stops and looks in the same shop window etc etc. Then repeating the same scene further in the feature, though this time the girl gets taken at the end of the scene.
I am probably swaying more towards Option 2 ATM, what do you guys think.